2) My feedback from my first pitch was great (I did not complete No. 2). One person wanted to know a little more about how I would "save a life" so I tried my best to incorporate it into this one.
3) What I changed was not based on feedback but based on how I needed to improve. I set my camera up to where I can stand and put on a business coat.
Hey Socheta, I like how you went an extra couple of minutes to explain your business idea. Although I am happy with one minute, there are a few that have trouble presenting their idea within that time frame. I think you have a great idea in place. However, I did find it hard to hear sometimes. You can check out my post at the following link: http://tmvuf.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html. Great job!
ReplyDeleteHi Tina, I think you could refine your video to make it sweeter and more of a quick pitch as to what you have to offer. Also, I am confused as to what your tangible service you are offering is other than to improve the wellness of the body and mind. I would suggest shortening your pitch and speaking with more enthusiasm to really engage the audience. Great job here's the link to my pitch if you'd like to check it out:
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I definitely was able to conclude that you want to help people, but I am not quite sure what you would be offering to people as a business? Is it strictly yoga classes? It is clear that you are passionate about your cause, but I would suggest speaking with more enthusiasm as well to really convey your passion! This is a really unique idea, and I am excited to learn more about it. I think you are on a path to success! Feel free to check out my elevator pitch: http://rachelecarter.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
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